Hello peope, heres the third page of my realmz.io comic. I didnt like how it looked at first, but i think it came out pretty good. Likes and comments very appreciated!!! 
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it looks fantastic, I think you have mastered the art of good comic strip sizes now. The dialogue could be improved, but overall, I would definitely read this (and continue to do so, to the other pages.)
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thanks, also what do u exactly mean by dialogue? which aspect of it could be improved? i cant tell myself, and some criticism wold help a lot
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I don’t read comics enough to critique it but it seems perfect imo
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“all of the citizens had to flee because there were too many of them.” sounds too wordy and boring, too declarative. Consider this change: “their numbers were just too large, so everybody fled in panic.” conveys more emotion (“fled in panic”) and puts extra focus on their extreme numbers (notice how I mentioned their numbers at the start?) which you can use to your advantage to increase the stakes.
Of course, you must make changes to the rest of this speech bubble to make it best, but it’s a good starting point.
Another example: “but they’re lovely and intelligent pets!”, replacing pets with creatures, or something similar, would better fit the sentence. Pets signify ownership, which defeats the purpose of calling them intelligent (in most cases, intelligent is used to signify that they are self governing, and are able to have some level of free thought.)
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I <3 sliem :D
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SLIMES
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im making this my alt’s pfp (if i can remember lmao)
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Mmmmm good points, thanks. although its really hard to make a comprehensible dialogue if i dont write it down beforehand, cuz i usually just make stuff up as i draw lol
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Haha that’s fine, just make sure to review the lore and dialogue afterwards to make them the best for storytelling.
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new realmz comic page dropped
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beautiful
absoluetly beautiful
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This is amazing! It would be great if slime taming is added in the upcoming survival mode.
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<3 fire asf
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You get a follow :D
(I only follow like 5 people)
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add me in the comic in the future make me the villain also make me the mutant skin in Halloween addition 
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where’d Keke go :((
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When are you going to make page 4? @Kekereke
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erm i kinda got distracted by my other art projects i hope u can forgive me 
not sure, i have the sketch down already but i still have a lot of other things on my mind
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